Writing

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With week for writing my goal was a level 3 goal and the goal was use reference sources to check meanings and find new words. And so what we had to do was get our biographies and get one sentence and edited it and make it look and sound better. I used a dictionary to help me understand some words and I went though and looked to see what words were missing and what made it sound better. Here it is⬇

Early Life - Edited

Bishop Paul was born in hasting in 1967.  He has 4 siblings and he is currently 53 years old. He attended school at St Joseph’s in Hastings and he then went to St John's College. In 1985 he attended formation for the society of Mary (The Society of Mary is a group of people that get together at St bede's college to learn about god). In 1991 he went to Northern Territory, Australia to spend some time at the Aboriginal Community. Then in 1993 he went to Rome to study to be a teacher and when he came back to New Zealand he was looking for teaching including St bedes.

Early Life - Not Edited

Bishop Paul was born in hasting in 1967 and has 4 siblings and he is 53 years old. He attended school at St Joseph’s in Hastings and he went to St John's College. In 1985 he attended formation for the society of Mary (The Society of Mary is a group of people that get together at St bede's college to learn about god). In 1991 he went to Northern Territory, Australia to spend some time at the Aboriginal Community and then in 1993 he went to Rome to study to be a teacher and when he came back to New Zealand he was looking for teaching including St bedes.

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